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Hi!

Please use this thread to post feedback and report any typos or errors in the Beta PDF for The Flowers of Algorab campaign, before July 3. Please note:

There are six Beta PDF: the Campaign Booklet, Expedition Booklet , handouts, trek maps, delve maps and blueprints. All text, layout, and art are subject to change and not final. When reporting errors, specify which PDF the error occurs in.

Please note that page references (xx) are not yet done as things may move around, so please don't report those as errors.

Before reporting an error, please check to see if it has already been reported. If so, don't report it again.

Thank you!

Not sure if this qualifies as a "typo or error" but the layout on p.107-108 is not good, to put it very mildly. You disrupt an ongoing block of text for a "Setting the Mood" sidebar, then have two entries of a random encounter table, then disrupt the table (which by itself I would consider a huge layout no-no) to complete the original text to then have the rest of the Hazard table. There has to be a much better way of organizing those three elements here.

I think there's a typo in the quote for the first chapter (page 2).
"There is more to this Lost Horizon than meets the eye. There must
be, otherwise we are all damned to live out our lives utterly alone."
I think it should be "our" (in the beta version it says "or")

Chapter 1 - Campaign Overview (pages 5-6):
It says there are eight chapters to the campaign but the following enumeration of the different chapters of the campaign go from 2 to 8.

Campaign book:

Page 2:

• " ...the fate of the long-lost Ark ship... "

Page 3:

• "...long time ago, in a Horizon far away, two ark ships..."

I am a little bit confused by the use of "Ark ship" and "ark ship" in the middle of a sentence.

Campaign book:

Page 6:

• "Playing a roleplaying campaign is a hugely fulfilling endeavor..."

This first sentence looks incredible crammed together, it looks like there are no spaces in the text.

• "...Seceder civilization’s existence on the other end of the Abyss"

Missing punctuation after Abyss.

Page 10:
The "SETTING THE MOOD" text box makes the narrative text break up in a bad way.

Page 14:
"Her black hair is wound in a tight knot, making her look even more severe than the uniform alone would suggest."
That is not the hairstyle she has in her picture.

Page 22:
"This is one of the supply ships to the Razad, which the Explorers can learn in the next part of the adventure, Artifact Hunt."
This sentence looks a little out of place, like it belongs somewhere else.

Page 28:
"... but the Gardener Guild spies will alert..."
Shouldn't it be Gardeners Guild?

Campaign book:

Page 41:

"...including any newly recruited specialists — – you are now ready to start..."
One – too many?

Page 42:

FACTIONS & AGENDAS table
Some sentences end with a punctuation, while others do not.

Campaign book:

Some of the NPC stat blocks uses punctuation, while others do not.

For example, Karmalia Merest reads "...star chart of Gahand Arm (+2)."
Misalem Vougir however reads "...and pipe"

You probably should go through all of the stat blocks and make sure you are consistent.

Hello,

In the campaign book:

• Pg 3, first paragraph: "They were called Zenit and Nadir, and each housed tens of thousands colonists in deep sleep". Should be tens of thousands of colonists.

• For the first adventure, a map of the Sadaalian Rose would be very useful, as the text makes it quite likely that a fight will occur there due to Bay Guards being called.

• Additionally, the "Aftermath" of the first adventure (pg. 35) would benefit from some details on how things move forward regarding the Wardens of the Well. Considering the caretakers of the only burial place in Ship City are arrested or killed, and need replacing, what could that look like? Especially since the events of the first adventure are otherwise kept secret by the guilds, but they couldn't hide the Wardens being gone.

In general I think it can be more clearly stated when the air on a planetary body or inside a structure is breathable.