Page 153, "A New Order"
First column, second paragraph begins "For the first time there is a due process for the RDU...."
"Due process" is a legal term with a specific meaning related to a suspect's/defendant's rights (to a jury trial, etc.) Although it's related, it's not really appropriate to use it as it is used in this context. This seems to be saying that "For the first time, there are procedural requirements for the RDU...."
Also, "where" in the second part of that sentence, should be "under which." While "where" can sometimes be used in this sort of construction, it's
An alternative is to rewrite the whole thing as "For the first time, Replicants are entitled to due process, and detectives must investigate..."
Same page, second column. "As if even one N-9 was proven capable of the old N-6 inhumanities, there'll be industrial upheavals...."
1. This sentence should begin either with "Because" or just plain "If."
2. "was proven" should either be "were proven" (subjunctive) - in which case "there'll" should be "there would" - OR it should be "is proven."