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Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Thu 16 Jun 2022, 11:10

Hi!

Please use this thread to report any typos or errors in Chapter 5 (A Tale of Two Cities) of the Early Access PDF of the BLADE RUNNER RPG Core Rulebook. Guidelines to remember:
  • Before reporting an error, please check and see if it already has been reported, and if so, don't report it again.
  • If you want to discuss or feedback something that is not a clear error, don't do it here - instead, please start a new forum post the specific issue.
Please report your feedback no later than July 1 2022. After this date, we may not be able to make any further changes.

Thank you!
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Dan Someone
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Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Fri 17 Jun 2022, 00:27

Possibly a stylistic thing more than a correction, but in the "Built to Last" section about Los Angeles on page 093, you've used:

"...as living spaces shrunk ..." (first column)

Technically correct, but "shrunk" is more of the past participle ("have shrunk") while "shrank" is the more common past tense.

Similarly in the second column, you have:

'...megastructures sprung up overnight..."

The more common past tense of "spring up" is "sprang up."
 
Dan Someone
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Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Fri 17 Jun 2022, 00:37

In "Nothing to Lose," the final paragraph reads:

"The Kipple are wild card threat areas, and you never know when its unpredictable element may interfere with a case or a casual Spinner flight with an electrified harpoon in your side."

There's a numerical mismatch. Either:

"The Kipple is a wild card threat area" (singular);

or

"...you never know when their unpredictable elements (plural) may interfere..."
 
GDIAinsley
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Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Fri 17 Jun 2022, 01:08

On page 100, in the last paragraph of the "Advertising" section, the sentence "It can be overwhelming, even violating at first for
the young or refugees new to the city." appears as both the first and third sentence. The second sentence references it, so the third sentence is the one that should be cut.
 
Dan Someone
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Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Fri 17 Jun 2022, 01:18

On p. 100:

"You decide and spend off-hours at your discretion. Just be discrete."

Although it looks like it should be right (because of "discretion"), the word should be "discreet."
 
Dan Someone
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Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Fri 17 Jun 2022, 01:23

Also on p. 100, "Passions & Poisons," it says "the bloodhounds in Internal Affairs will sniff you out before you even know you're downwind."

If you're downwind of the hounds, they won't sniff you out at all. Might be better to use a different phrase, like "before you even know they're on your trail." (You could go with "before you even know they're downwind," or "before you even know you're upwind," but neither of those sounds quite right.")
 
GDIAinsley
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Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Fri 17 Jun 2022, 01:26

The last sentence of page 116, paragraph 4 says "How far above they lord over the lower classes far below." It should say "Now" instead of "How," based on context.
 
GDIAinsley
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Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Fri 17 Jun 2022, 01:33

The last sentence of the first paragraph of page 120 says "wrap sheet." It should be "rap sheet."
 
GDIAinsley
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Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Fri 17 Jun 2022, 01:35

The last sentence of paragraph 4 on page 120 says "Sector 1" when it means to say "Sector 2." The second sentence of paragraph 5 on the same page repeats this mistake.
 
Dan Someone
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Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Fri 17 Jun 2022, 02:20

Sector 9 description, p. 116.

The sentence beginning at the bottom of column one and carrying over to the top of column 2 reads "Yet head street level..."

Should be "Yet head to [or toward] street level..."

Also in that same sentence, "you'd find" should probably be "you'll find."

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