(This is only my opinion of some of the text in the beta version of the pdf released, so I thought to make a separate thread to have a gripe about minor matters in the pdf that show my failings more than those of the authors!)
April 23
On page 92 column 2 paragraph 3 line 3 it reads "....Dunedains numbers had grown very THIN..."
Imho I don't like this phrase. Numbers are a quantity, and not a dimension. The numbers might grow LESS or SMALLER, or even simply DIMINISH, but it feels an odd construct to read the number getting thin.
(This actually echoes a phrase mentioned by Hugo Weaving in the film version of the Fellowship of the Ring, , when his Elrond complains to Gandalf that the "list of allies grows thin." A list should not get thin, it might be SHORT however. )
Page 9 Column 2 Paragraph 2 line 10 reads " when even the following Master abandoned his post"
Does this need this use of the word "even" at this point?
Page 24 Column 2 paragraph 4 (this is the paragraph just before The Mines of Harmelt) lines 5 and 6 reads
" ... there is only a single individual alone in the hall, a terrible death will come for that lone fool." This has four words referring to the idea of being solitary, and it reads a bit heavy-handed or awkward to me. Deleting the word alone in this sentence seems to improve it to me.
Page 77 column 1 paragraph 5 THE HAUNTED CHAMBER lines 1 and 3 contain a double use of the word "hidden". Maybe delete one of these uses, or change the second use to read " also hidden". It reads easier to me that way.