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Pages 74-78. Space & vehicle combat lacks initiative resolution info. Movement is clear, then it lists possible actions but no information on resolving order.

Chase part informs that " Chases are played out in rounds just like combat, but each round starts with resolving movement before other actions." Similar info should be added to spaceship & vehicle combat part. Are turns done by in initiative order per player & npc, or per ship/vehicle or is everything resolved at same time?

There's also possible balance issue with shuttles/rovers. Weapon require turret that uses upgrade slot. Technically wrecker pirate crews could make 6 turret grasshopper and make all 6 passengers to gun the turrets and try to gun everything down. GM can tone those designs down or specs could include maximum amount of turrets.

A note on Chapter 15 ” The Black Ziggurat”.

On p.268 in the Black Ziggurat ”the situation” starts with

Two weeks ago, the Navigator shuttle Aramis touched down outside the ziggurat.

The explorers then receive their mission from, guild leader, Moska, who to my understanding, is in the Jumuah-system.
A message about what happened to envoy Sirh-shuttle would go through the ”deseram channel” and, according to the map on p.180-181, it’s 48 leagues. That journey would take a greatship 12 week of travel (and 12 weeks back with a message or a group of explorers).

So it seems there is a problem with the timeline in the adventure. It’s easily explained with Moska and a representative of the navigators guild being in-system, or the request is sent from someone else, but i found it inconsistent with my understanding of travel and means of communication.

Page 150:
Sometime the text says "the Guild Militias", and other times "the Guild militias".

Page 151:

• "The City is a wonder..." - I am not sure if it should be City or city here. You are talking about the only existing city after all.

• On the page you can read "the guilds" at a few different places. In most of the other parts of the book you write "the Guilds".

Page 152:

• "There was no way out of the Jumuahn system..." - Shouldn't it be Jumuah? Or maybe I get confused with the grammar.

Page 154:

• "Every nook and cranny of the City..." - Once again, I am not sure if it should be City or city.

• "...reaching out from history to protect their ascendants in their new home." - Shouldn't it be "descendants"? Since it is the ancestors that are thought to protect their living relatives.

Page 156:

• Sometime you write "the City", and other times "the city". It would probably be good to go through the spelling of "city" in the whole book.

Pages 158-159:
Ship City Map
In the map the legend says "9. Aluminium Bay", but in the rest of the book it is spelled "Aluminum Bay".

The blight crawlers seem to be missing they're ability from the quicksand rules of only taking damage from fire but the flavor text still says to flee if you don't have flamers

The blight crawlers seem to be missing they're ability from the quicksand rules of only taking damage from fire but the flavor text still says to flee if you don't have flamers

Disregard I see the rules for a "swarm" that clarifies that

Page 282, mission briefing, "PERMISSION TO USE LEATHAL FORCE" should be "...LETHAL...".

I love the atmosphere of the game!

Page 120's timeline states "3 – The discovery of the tomb portal Arakvarat" (YEAR 3)

Page 126's timeline states "The Tomb Portal" (YEAR FOUND) "75"

Either they refer to different things (and it is unclear that they do), or one, or both stated years are wrong

NB: also note that "Sour Davidhon (21–99)" (EXPLORERS) on page 126 may need editing also, depending

Pg. 39 - It's and not its should be used in the Deep Miner flavor text.

Pg. 43 - Guilds should be Guild's in the flavor text for Tech Smuggler.

Pg. 50 - "...when fighting with blade weapons" isn't the best grammatically. Bladed would be more appropriate.

Pg. 52 - "...but also to spot a disguise." is grammatically clunky. Replace but with and.

Pg. 62 - Under Ranged Combat, "even if it is just something to throw".

Pg. 69 - Under Hallucinations, the roll is listed as Insight, but Despair is an Empathy roll.

Pg. 107 - The description of the Marfid Heavy Terminal is inconsistent with the other two terminals. Other terminals consume, Marfid needs.

Pg. 109 - In the description of Mazelmann's Fantastic Travels, "...a massive page count" should be "...and a massive page count".

Pg. 112 - Hydroponic Garden Cube lacks a cost.

Pg. 138 - The sidebar contains information already stated, unlike the rest of the sidebars in this section. Some additional fluff would be appreciated.

Pg. 152 - The side bar here makes mention that the Feast of the Hammurabi was written in the Decadent Days, which should be impossible. Pg. 175 under Icehenge states that the Decadent Days were in the first century, while the Hammurabi's first voyage was in 123.

Pg. 169 - Under Observatory Hill, house should be houses. Under Sinban Maze, building should be plural. Under Corrosion Bay, dust-runner should be plural. Under The Purple Fields, "is a very" may work better as are a very.

Pg. 192/3 - The typical Hull range for Greatships is inconsistent. Is it 12-30 or 16-30?

Pg. 208 - Class V delves are not described in the sidebar, despite being mentioned elsewhere.

Pg. 234 - Under Slipstream Nieba, it should either be "Niebas are denizens of deep and truly alien spaces, with oxygen being highly toxic to them.", or "Niebas are denizens of the deep and are a truly alien species, with oxygen being highly toxic to them.".

Pg. 239 - Greatships under Fire Meteoroids is unnecessarily pluralized.

Pg. 253 - Deviation is misspelled as "diviation"

Pg. 267 - The Black Ziggurat is stated to have been built 700,000 years ago to combat the Blight during the Third Era. The Builders do not seem to have a Third Era, but they do have a Late Era, but this was only 100,000 - 150,000 years ago.

Two General Notes:
Vehicles can be destroyed, but no price is given for them. How might they be reacquired?
The background texture used for the item and vehicle display is jarringly out of place. Perhaps replace it.

Page 102:
If I understand the rules correctly shields can now only be used to block melee attacks. I understand if you don't want a shield to block a shot from a rifle, but right now it seems you can't use a shield to block a throwing blade.

Page 100:
Perhaps it could be fun to add more primitive projectile weapons as well, in case your explorers would be stranded somewhere without weapons.

Page 166:

• "People here keep to themselves, and lost wanderers drift through the streets like the jinni of planet- bound tales." - I think you mean "djinni" and not "jinni".

Pages 167-169:
It's unclear to me what the difference is between a "kawahllery" and a "kawah shop".


Chapter 8, Guilds & Factions:
In this chapter you often write "the guild" or "the guilds". While in other chapters you write "the Guild" or "the Guilds". You probably should go through all the chapters and see that you are consistent with how you write it. On the same note, you probably should check that you are consistent with writing "Explorers" or "explorers" throughout the book.

Page 135:

• "Led by Albay Zora Kahn, the Purple Guards are stationed in Astrolaab Tower in Ship City but sometimes deployed to unruly hotspots in the Charted Sphere." - I think it should be "... but are sometimes deployed..."

Page 136:

• "The Santarovean paintings of the inner hull are colossal art works made during the construction of Ship City by the then newly founded guild." - I think it should be written either "artworks" or "works of art", not "art works".

• "The Machinist Guild has dozens of branches and subdivisions." - Should be "Machinists Guild", not "Machinist Guild".