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Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Posted: Sat 19 Nov 2016, 00:22
by Alphast
I stand corrected (posts edited: I left only the ones where it could be detrimental to the meaning).

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Posted: Sat 19 Nov 2016, 00:37
by The1TrueFredrix
Page 376, two instances of Vaning should be Level

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Posted: Sat 19 Nov 2016, 03:30
by DustyHead
I figured I might as well try to be productive while I read, so I started keeping editing notes from the start. As you’ll see in the file I’ve linked, I may've gotten a little carried away. Consequently, I still haven't read past the first chapter :-P Not sure if dissection at this level is actually helpful this late in the game, but I figure it can't hurt to pass along what I have. Take what you will, and I apologize for the inevitable overlap.

Intro & Chapter 1 Edits

(A couple words of explanation on the file itself. The bulk of the entries revolve around either punctuation--mainly comma usage--or awkward word choice/phrasing. Only a few of them affect actual readability, but I find that technical precision and clarity is generally worth pursuing. I’ve tried to highlight in yellow any entries that reflect a personal attempt to smooth out the English rather than a reference to a hard-and-fast rule.)

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Posted: Sat 19 Nov 2016, 12:11
by GIJose
I'm iffy on the use of the word habitate. Shouldn't it be inhabit (in the case of that sentence from page 12 inhabited)?

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Posted: Sat 19 Nov 2016, 22:33
by aunderwo
Pg 109

Ordinary computers are
harder to command (-1) than Advanced ones (+1).

This seems a bit back to front. Easier for a Data Djinn to operate an ordinary computer? Is this not child's play for a Data Djinn?

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Posted: Sat 19 Nov 2016, 23:27
by everyman
Page 49

For the soldier's gear:
4. Command unit      or      targeting scope
The targeting scope is a cybernetic implant, but isn't marked with the (CYB) tag [as the soldier's cybernetic muscles (CYB) are, or the pilot's targeting scope (CYB) for the matter]. 
Also, cybernetic implants are accompanied by a matching Talent choice; targeting scope (CYB) is absent from the solider's talent list

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Posted: Sun 20 Nov 2016, 01:15
by aunderwo
Although the price of an armoured Gravcraft is mentioned in the Gear chapter, I can not see any stats for this on page 100

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Posted: Sun 20 Nov 2016, 01:37
by aunderwo
Pg 100


An enforcer from the Syndicate fires a missile against
Sabah’s gravcraft. The attack hits and deals 4 points
of damage. Sabah tests the gravcraft’s armor (Armor
Rating 3), and rolls one six. The gravcraft takes 3
points of damage.



In example missile does 4 damage but page 127 states that a missile launcher deals 6 damage

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Posted: Sun 20 Nov 2016, 08:51
by The1TrueFredrix
Page 346, table 15.2 difficult, should be difficulty

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Posted: Mon 21 Nov 2016, 10:22
by aunderwo
Hi Admins

Have you though about having something like a public Trello board where typos could be listed categorised and eventually moved to completed when incorporated in the edited Beta PDF?

see https://trello.com/b/sGnOPWaS/coriolis as an example of what it could look like