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Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Fri 18 Nov 2016, 11:23

pg 347
"CHARACTERISTICS: Leans on cane, clicks mouth, whizzing cybernetic eye."
What does "clicks mouth" mean? As a native English speaker I don't understand what this is supposed to mean.
Also by "whizzing" do you mean "spinning" or "whirling"?
 
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Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Fri 18 Nov 2016, 12:13

pg 26
"If you have the Icon deck (sold separately), draw a card to see which Icon is yours – otherwise use table 2.6"
This should be "table 2.5"
 
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Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Fri 18 Nov 2016, 14:17

Page 234: 
"Myth and folklore across the Horizon usually describes the Gambler as a trickster, [...]"
Since there are two subjects, the verb should be conjugated as follows: "describe".

"On Mira, one incarnate of the Gambler is the Ensnarer who comes for the cowardly and the weak that are afraid to take risks in life."
Actually, "incarnate" in English is either a verb or an adjective but not a noun. It should be "incarnation" (or "avatar").

"The Gambler appreciates simple offerings, such as dice, Gambler cards from an Icon deck, or a mug of wine or some other kohôl."
Repetition of "or" is to be avoided. Suggest just removing the first one.
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Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Fri 18 Nov 2016, 14:24

Page 235:
"ships, and stores, if they’re well-kept and the right offerings have been made."
Unnecessary comma.
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Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Fri 18 Nov 2016, 14:33

Page 236:
"is confessions of one’s failings and lies, and remorseful penance."
Makes no sense to be plural here, should most likely be "confession".

"Offerings to the Traveler are usually a knotted hemp rope or crude string, or a figurine of a ship, a dromedon, a horse, or some other transportation craft."
Should remove the "or" here.
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Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Fri 18 Nov 2016, 14:42

Page 237:
"Only a few asteroid communities or very remote space stations keep from burning their dead, instead letting the station’s recycling systems take care of the corpses, but this is a custom of bad, almost unholy, repute.."
Should either be one full stop or three but not two.

"On the stage, the Faceless One is portrayed as masked figure all in black that sneaks about the set, rearranging the props and giving or taking away object from the actors."
I believe the correct expression is "on stage" and there is a missing article, so it should be "as a masked".

"Unsubstantiated but persistent rumors claim that certain unsavory cults on Mira and Dabaran worship a perverted aspect of the Faceless One with human sacrifice to quench the Icon’s thirst for souls."
Most likely should be plural: "sacrifices".
 
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Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Fri 18 Nov 2016, 18:21

Page 238:
"From Mira, Coriolis, and Dabaran, the matriarchs and patriarchs rule the Church, living in life bonds with one another but without children, as they are firmly devoted to the Icons only."
Unnecessary comma.
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Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Fri 18 Nov 2016, 21:29

On behalf of Kyle Neese on the Google+ group: 
The box at the bottom of page 23, 'PLAYING A SEMI-INTELLIGENCE?', says "have the GM check the rules for semi-intelligent species in Chapter 10.However, the rules for this seem to be located in Chapter 14, in a box on Page 318 'SEMI-INTELLIGENCES AS PCS?'.
 
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Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Fri 18 Nov 2016, 22:15

Alphast, using an Oxford Comma is not a typo or an error. Oxford Commas are preferential, stylistic, and clarificatory. They are discouraged in AP Style, yes, but otherwise their usage is up to the writer's preferences. As such, there is no need to point out each and every one.

On to typos and errors:

Page 25

The last two sentences of the first paragraph (under the SKILLS heading) read:
Your mastery of a certain skill is called your skill level and is a number from 0 to 5 – the higher, the better. skills and their use are described in detail in Chapter 3.  
The 's' of the word 'skills' in last sentence should be capitalized.
 
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Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Fri 18 Nov 2016, 22:59

Pg 64

the sub-concept Mystic (page 37)

This should be page 35
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