Angelus1753
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Beta Feedback - Beta Cards

Mon 03 May 2021, 19:35

The Jack of Spades (Hammer of God) contains a type-o:
Thet get a +3 bonus -> Should be they

The King of Cloves (OUTNUMBERED) contains a missing comma:
(full tank an officer inside) -> Should be full tank, officer inside
 
Freddyb
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Re: Beta Feedback - Beta Cards

Mon 03 May 2021, 22:38

The Cards "Hungry and Angry" and "My kill, my meat" both is marked with Clubs 7
 
Zace66
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Re: Beta Feedback - Beta Cards

Mon 03 May 2021, 22:40

Page 40 - 6 hearts - THE FINAL REST
'inside' twice in the second sentence.
Decomposed bodies of a
family inside can be found inside.
Probably best to remove the first inside so it reads 'Decomposed bodies of a family can be found inside.

For more interesting language, I would possibly change it to 'Decomposing bodies of a family can be found inside.'
 
Zace66
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Re: Beta Feedback - Beta Cards

Mon 03 May 2021, 22:50

Page 55 - 7 hearts - THE OLD WANDERER

2nd sentence does not need the comma (,) after Now
 
Zace66
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Re: Beta Feedback - Beta Cards

Mon 03 May 2021, 22:52

Page 51 - 4 Hearts - THE BATTLEFIELD

line 5 has an extra 'a' in it.
 
Zace66
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Re: Beta Feedback - Beta Cards

Mon 03 May 2021, 22:56

Looking at the faction on each card - the position of the content is seemingly random. It would look better if it was the same for all - the line UNDER would allow the space onall cards it seems.
 
Zace66
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Re: Beta Feedback - Beta Cards

Mon 03 May 2021, 22:57

The word 'assuage' appears on a few cards. This is quite an outdated word, I know this is a 'pseudo-retro' game but a better word might be 'appease'.
 
paladin2019
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Re: Beta Feedback - Beta Cards

Tue 04 May 2021, 01:08

The word 'assuage' appears on a few cards. This is quite an outdated word, I know this is a 'pseudo-retro' game but a better word might be 'appease'.
Assuage is not outdated and the two mean very different things.
 
paladin2019
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Re: Beta Feedback - Beta Cards

Tue 04 May 2021, 01:39

10 of diamonds. The spelling is "Whatcha"

2 of diamonds. This card, and all others using the same illustration, have reversed the image. Not a big deal if this isn't corrected, I don't think it's big enough to see the technical clues to the reversal.

King of Clubs (alternate). "full tank an officer inside" can also be "full tank with an officer inside"

Jack of Clubs. Add a comma "," between PCs and they.
 
BigAlinVA
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Re: Beta Feedback - Beta Cards

Tue 04 May 2021, 04:11

5 of Diamonds: "...and a the corpse..." should be "...and the corpse..."

6 of Hearts: In addition to the previously noted "inside" repetition, "...scrounging rolls here gets a..." should be "...here get a..."

10 of Hearts: Can remove the comma from the last sentence

4 of Spades: "scrounging here requires a a recon roll..." (a is repeated)

5 of Spades: "...meters deep a with a lake..." should be "...meters deep with a lake..."

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