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Beta Feedback - Player's Manual Chapter 1 - You're On Your Own

Tue 20 Apr 2021, 15:12

Please use this thread to report any typos or errors in Chapter 1 - You're On Your Own in the Player's Manual of the Beta PDF. Rules to remember:
  • Before reporting an error, please check and see if it already has been reported, and if so, don't report it again.
  • If you want to discuss or feedback something that is not a clear error, don't do it here - instead, please start a new forum post the specific issue.
  • If you feedbacked on something in the Alpha PDF and it's not changed in the Beta, it's there by choice - we have carefully studied all of the Alpha feedback, so please do NOT feedback on the exact same thing again, unless it's a clear typo or error.
  • Please report your feedback no later than May 1. After this date, we are unlikely to be able to make any further changes.
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Re: Beta Feedback - Player's Manual Chapter 1 - You're On Your Own

Tue 20 Apr 2021, 19:31

Some of the PDF bookmarks have only a number in chapter 01 and 02:
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Re: Beta Feedback - Player's Manual Chapter 1 - You're On Your Own

Tue 20 Apr 2021, 19:44

Some of the PDF bookmarks have only a number in chapter 01 and 02:
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Right sorry, the PDF bookmarks are not fixed at all in the Beta, please ignore those. Sorry!
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Re: Beta Feedback - Player's Manual Chapter 1 - You're On Your Own

Tue 20 Apr 2021, 20:52

Page 08 - Help Those In Need - Last Sentence:

It is up to you and your conscience whether to help those
in worse need then yourselves, or leave them to their fate.

'then' should be 'than'

Also, please specify if you need further proofreading errors reported and I will continue to do so. If you have a proofreader then I can stop. :)
 
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Re: Beta Feedback - Player's Manual Chapter 1 - You're On Your Own

Tue 20 Apr 2021, 22:04

Throughout: There are still widows and orphans throughout the book. See second paragraph in the second column on 07 ending with “story”, second paragraph in the second column on page 11 ending in “gameplay”, and the sixth paragraph in that column ending in “battlefield”.
This can be fixed by adding a GREP Style to the paragraph style for your body copy and a new character style: Create a character style called "no break" which only has No Break checked in the Basic Character Formats section. Under that style’s GREP Styles setting, apply style no break to (?<=\w)\s(?=\w+[[:punct:]]*\r) . This applies that style to the space before the last word in a paragraph, which will keep the last two words in a paragraph together on a line. Note that this may reflow some copy throughout the book.

Page 06: I’m thinking you have balance ragged lines on for this paragraph style. The two-line paragraphs that start “It was no surprise it went to hell.” and “It doesn’t matter anymore, anyway.” break in odd places.

Page 11: Too much leading before CARDS heading.
 
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Re: Beta Feedback - Player's Manual Chapter 1 - You're On Your Own

Wed 21 Apr 2021, 22:21

Page 6. “You’re on your own now.” is a very different message from HQ than the original "Good luck. You're on your own."
 
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Re: Beta Feedback - Player's Manual Chapter 1 - You're On Your Own

Wed 05 May 2021, 08:55

Page 6. “You’re on your own now.” is a very different message from HQ than the original "Good luck. You're on your own."
This is interesting! Page 2 of the 1st edition Play Manual says: "You’re on your own. Good luck." But the version at the end of the adventure handout Escape from Kalisz is a little different: "Good luck. You're on your own, now." Your quote seems to be yet another version - where did you see it?
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Re: Beta Feedback - Player's Manual Chapter 1 - You're On Your Own

Wed 05 May 2021, 09:49

Hi Tomas

Is there any chance for folks like me that missed the Kickstarter to get in on beta proofreading? I'm a big T2000 fan with all the prior editions.

Thanks
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Re: Beta Feedback - Player's Manual Chapter 1 - You're On Your Own

Wed 05 May 2021, 19:18

Page 6. “You’re on your own now.” is a very different message from HQ than the original "Good luck. You're on your own."
This is interesting! Page 2 of the 1st edition Play Manual says: "You’re on your own. Good luck." But the version at the end of the adventure handout Escape from Kalisz is a little different: "Good luck. You're on your own, now." Your quote seems to be yet another version - where did you see it?
2e. The point is, without the "Good Luck", the CG is abandoning responsibility rather than issuing guidance in the face of a disastrous breakdown in the ability to command.

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