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by Alphast
Fri 18 Nov 2016, 18:21
Forum: General
Topic: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF
Replies: 82
Views: 42107

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Page 238:
"From Mira, Coriolis, and Dabaran, the matriarchs and patriarchs rule the Church, living in life bonds with one another but without children, as they are firmly devoted to the Icons only."
Unnecessary comma.
by Alphast
Fri 18 Nov 2016, 14:42
Forum: General
Topic: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF
Replies: 82
Views: 42107

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Page 237: "Only a few  asteroid communities or very remote space stations keep from  burning their dead, instead letting the station’s recycling systems  take care of the corpses, but this is a custom of bad, almost  unholy, repute .. " Should either be one full stop or three but not two ...
by Alphast
Fri 18 Nov 2016, 14:33
Forum: General
Topic: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF
Replies: 82
Views: 42107

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Page 236: "is confession s of one’s failings and lies, and remorseful penance." Makes no sense to be plural here, should most likely be " confession ". "Offerings to the  Traveler are usually a knotted hemp rope or crude string,   or a figurine of a ship, a dromedon, a hors...
by Alphast
Fri 18 Nov 2016, 14:24
Forum: General
Topic: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF
Replies: 82
Views: 42107

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Page 235:
"ships, and stores, if they’re well-kept and the right offerings have been made."
Unnecessary comma.
by Alphast
Fri 18 Nov 2016, 14:17
Forum: General
Topic: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF
Replies: 82
Views: 42107

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Page 234:  "Myth and folklore across the Horizon usually describe s the Gambler as a trickster, [...]" Since there are two subjects, the verb should be conjugated as follows: " describe ". "On Mira, one incarnate of the  Gambler is the Ensnarer who comes for the cowardly an...
by Alphast
Fri 18 Nov 2016, 09:51
Forum: General
Topic: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF
Replies: 82
Views: 42107

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Page 233:
"Sometimes woman, sometimes man, but most times androg-
ynous and ungendered like the hijras."
The word cut should be as follows: "Sometimes woman, sometimes man, but most times andro-
gynous and ungendered like the hijras."
by Alphast
Fri 18 Nov 2016, 09:39
Forum: General
Topic: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF
Replies: 82
Views: 42107

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Page 232:
"In some places they are even praised under different names, but according to the Church of Icons, they are still the same Icons."
The comma should be after "but": "names but, according".
by Alphast
Thu 17 Nov 2016, 19:53
Forum: General
Topic: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF
Replies: 82
Views: 42107

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Page 230:
"A Zalosian version of the prophet songs is the chant choirs, although they often end in revels of flagellation."
It should be "are the chant choirs", because the latter are the actual subject of the verb.
by Alphast
Thu 17 Nov 2016, 19:33
Forum: General
Topic: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF
Replies: 82
Views: 42107

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Pages 228-229: " O n Coriolis and in cities with a strong Consortium pres- enc e,  you will find the Bulletin’s terminals, connected  through the encrypted infonet." This sentence is between both pages. First is the wrong space at the beginning. It should be of course " On ". Th...
by Alphast
Thu 17 Nov 2016, 19:14
Forum: General
Topic: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF
Replies: 82
Views: 42107

Re: Typos/Errors in the Coriolis Beta PDF

Page 227:
"Travel, once reserved for a select few, is now in bloom across all the systems."
I believe you should prefer "blooming", to make the sentence lighter.