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by FishingOtter
Mon 22 May 2023, 07:35
Forum: General
Topic: Davokar Awakens Beta Feedback
Replies: 20
Views: 7294

Re: Davokar Awakens Beta Feedback

On page 158, paragraph 2 of “Journey to the Mother Tree,” the names of monster types (Crypt Lord, Dragouls) are not capitalized as they normally are. There’s no page reference for where to find Dragoul stats (Core book, page 230). Likewise, on page 185 under “Wyrhta Triumphs,” paragraph 2, the word ...
by FishingOtter
Sun 21 May 2023, 23:52
Forum: General
Topic: Davokar Awakens Beta Feedback
Replies: 20
Views: 7294

Re: Davokar Awakens Beta Feedback

Page 20: his forces have been able to repel the enemy attacks so far instead of his forces have so far been able to repel the enemy’s attacks Lots of good suggestions here! Replacing "so far" with "thus far" is also an option that adds a somewhat archaic (but common) word choice...
by FishingOtter
Sun 21 May 2023, 23:44
Forum: General
Topic: Davokar Awakens Beta Feedback
Replies: 20
Views: 7294

Re: Davokar Awakens Beta Feedback

The comma after “the Night of Slaughter,” on page 20 (first paragraph) should be inside quotation marks. Same with the semicolon on page 32 after “pure magic” (second to last paragraph). Same with the comma after “exalted” on page 118 (first paragraph after Ogoron's dialogue). Likewise, the commas i...
by FishingOtter
Sun 21 May 2023, 22:59
Forum: General
Topic: Davokar Awakens Beta Feedback
Replies: 20
Views: 7294

Re: Davokar Awakens Beta Feedback

The text box “Korinthia Dead” on page 14 misspells Dekamedo as “Dekemedo.” The map on page 156-157 misspells “edible” as “edibel.” On page 144, final paragraph of “Aluin’s Powers,” the “if” after “However…” should not be capitalized. On page 140, the section “Esmerelda’s Artifacts” starts with some ...
by FishingOtter
Fri 19 May 2023, 07:14
Forum: General
Topic: Davokar Awakens Beta Feedback
Replies: 20
Views: 7294

Re: Davokar Awakens Beta Feedback

The first thing I noticed was that Prince Eneano's orders/decision that appears on page 13 is different from when it appears in Symbar: Mother of Darkness on page 63. In Davokar Awakens , it is: "Let the evil that humanity has wrought remain, waiting and dormant; let it live on to remind us of ...