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by DougR650
Wed 22 Jun 2022, 08:04
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 2
Replies: 27
Views: 1010

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 2

p 41:
You’ve got rats in every gutter. Pigeons on every rooftop. Urchin in every port.
Use of parallelism in these 3 sentences demands that the last of these 3 read "Urchins in every port." Must be consistent with the preceding two sentences, else it sounds very bad.
by DougR650
Thu 16 Jun 2022, 23:35
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 1
Replies: 15
Views: 683

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 1

Opening Section Page 16/Line 1: "It took centuries with countless [parties? people?] sharing the blame..." There's a word missing after "countless." P16/Line 9: "...colonization finally expanded, within [?] years growing to nine colonized worlds... Seems to be a number miss...