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by Dan Someone
Sun 19 Jun 2022, 01:03
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 7
Replies: 25
Views: 558

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 7

Page 153, "A New Order" First column, second paragraph begins "For the first time there is a due process for the RDU...." "Due process" is a legal term with a specific meaning related to a suspect's/defendant's rights (to a jury trial, etc.) Although it's related, it's ...
by Dan Someone
Sun 19 Jun 2022, 00:46
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 6
Replies: 20
Views: 477

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 6

Page 147, "More or Less Human Than Humans" First column, sixth paragraph (just before "Where Are They Now?") "Shouldn't Reps be entitled equal rights?" should read "Shouldn't Reps be entitled to equal rights?" Second column, second full paragraph: " Borne...
by Dan Someone
Sun 19 Jun 2022, 00:36
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 6
Replies: 20
Views: 477

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 6

Page 142, "Nexus-1 to Nexus-5":

Second column, first paragraph, "...resulting in most outdated models being returned or scraped."
Should be "scrapped."
by Dan Someone
Fri 17 Jun 2022, 03:17
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 6
Replies: 20
Views: 477

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 6

Page 141, "Relations," first paragraph:

"...to the point where the success of both institutions are cells interlinked." This makes no sense to me, and I'm not even sure I can parse it to come up with a better way of writing it. What is it meant to say?
by Dan Someone
Fri 17 Jun 2022, 03:14
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 6
Replies: 20
Views: 477

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 6

Page 139, section titled "The Information War," second paragraph, there's a sentence that starts "Plus, more each day people are using WDN ..." That's awkward. It should probably be "Plus, more people each [or every] day are using WDN..." or "Plus each [or every] d...
by Dan Someone
Fri 17 Jun 2022, 03:00
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 6
Replies: 20
Views: 477

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 6

Page 135, "Periodicals":
Shouldn't "Kill" in the middle of the first column be all caps, "KILL"?
by Dan Someone
Fri 17 Jun 2022, 02:41
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5
Replies: 36
Views: 1069

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Page 127, in "Off-World: Off-Limits": The name "Shimago-Domin geuz " in the second paragraph should be "Shimago-Domin guez ." Third paragraph, "The rigors of space travel and the cryogenic process is a physically demanding experience ..." Should be " are ...
by Dan Someone
Fri 17 Jun 2022, 02:26
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5
Replies: 36
Views: 1069

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Page 120, first paragraph of "Sector 2" description: " wrap sheet" should be " rap sheet." Second paragraph, reference to " Section 1" should be " Sector 1." Several references to "Sector 1" that should be "Sector 2 ": "...Se...
by Dan Someone
Fri 17 Jun 2022, 02:20
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5
Replies: 36
Views: 1069

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Sector 9 description, p. 116. The sentence beginning at the bottom of column one and carrying over to the top of column 2 reads "Yet head street level..." Should be "Yet head to [or toward ] street level..." Also in that same sentence, "you'd find" should probably be &q...
by Dan Someone
Fri 17 Jun 2022, 01:23
Forum: General
Topic: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5
Replies: 36
Views: 1069

Re: Early Access Feedback - Core Rulebook Chapter 5

Also on p. 100, "Passions & Poisons," it says "the bloodhounds in Internal Affairs will sniff you out before you even know you're downwind." If you're downwind of the hounds, they won't sniff you out at all. Might be better to use a different phrase, like "before you eve...
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